Juicy Details
Revising means making your writing better by adding details, stronger words, and more information. Think of it as turning a plain sandwich into a DELICIOUS sandwich!
Plain sentence: I have a dog.
Revised: I have a big, fluffy golden retriever named Sunny who loves to play fetch.
Plain sentence: We went to the park.
Revised: We went to the sunny park near our house and played on the twisty slide until the streetlights came on.
Plain sentence: I ate lunch.
Revised: I ate a warm grilled cheese sandwich with tomato soup for lunch, and it was so cheesy the strings stretched from my mouth to the plate!
See how the revised sentences paint a picture in your mind? You can SEE the fluffy dog, FEEL the twisty slide, and TASTE the cheesy sandwich. That is the power of details!